Word choice - earned / made ..reached a peak of about.. HK$60 million..(no 's') in the early 1997; in the early 1990s.. Focus more on the general trends rather than describing year by year. You should give a reason for the increases and decreases. Use sub headings. Staff (plural, but no 's') are / were... Are your reasons in the table still true? if so, use the present tense. Spelling - efficiency Explain more why an uncomfortable working environment leads to lower working efficiency. Profits by Mojo in Hong Kong As is shown in Figure 1, Mojo earned 30 million dollars in 1994. After that, there was a gradual growth in profits which reached a peak about 60 million dollars in the early 1997. Then they fell dramatically between 1997 and 1998; and hit a trough of about 20 million dollars in 1999. Eventually, they rebounded and increased to an amount of about 40 million dollars in 2001.
Profits by Mojo in Singapore
According to the same figure, Mojo had an income about 40 million dollars in 1994. The profits reached a peak in 1995. Then they leveled off within this year and declined steadily to an amount of 30 million dollars in 1998. After that, there was no change in the profits between 1998 and 1999, followed by another steady decline between 1999 and 2001.
Satisfaction with working conditinos among senior and junior staff
After the investigation about the staff satisfaction, we found that over half of both the senior staff and the junior staff were satisfied with most of the aspects including in this survey. Nevertheless, the conditions of "Office furniture", "Equipment" and "Pantry" could not reach the staff's expectation.
With reference to "Office furniture", although three quarters of senior staff were satisfied with this aspect, there was still less than half of junior staff satisfied with this. This is because most of the new purchased furniture were used by senior staff only rather than junior staff. The junior staff had to work in an uncomfortable environment with a lower efficieny.
With regards to the "Equipment", just over seven out of ten of senior staff were satisfied with this aspect while
Word choice - earned / made
..reached a peak of about..
HK$60 million..(no 's')
in the early 1997; in the early 1990s..
Focus more on the general trends rather than describing year by year.
You should give a reason for the increases and decreases.
Use sub headings.
Staff (plural, but no 's') are / were...
Are your reasons in the table still true? if so, use the present tense.
Spelling - efficiency
Explain more why an uncomfortable working environment leads to lower working efficiency.
Profits by Mojo in Hong Kong
As is shown in Figure 1, Mojo earned 30 million dollars in 1994. After that, there was a gradual growth in profits which reached a peak about 60 million dollars in the early 1997. Then they fell dramatically between 1997 and 1998; and hit a trough of about 20 million dollars in 1999. Eventually, they rebounded and increased to an amount of about 40 million dollars in 2001.
Profits by Mojo in Singapore
According to the same figure, Mojo had an income about 40 million dollars in 1994. The profits reached a peak in 1995. Then they leveled off within this year and declined steadily to an amount of 30 million dollars in 1998. After that, there was no change in the profits between 1998 and 1999, followed by another steady decline between 1999 and 2001.
Satisfaction with working conditinos among senior and junior staff
After the investigation about the staff satisfaction, we found that over half of both the senior staff and the junior staff were satisfied with most of the aspects including in this survey. Nevertheless, the conditions of "Office furniture", "Equipment" and "Pantry" could not reach the staff's expectation.
With reference to "Office furniture", although three quarters of senior staff were satisfied with this aspect, there was still less than half of junior staff satisfied with this. This is because most of the new purchased furniture were used by senior staff only rather than junior staff. The junior staff had to work in an uncomfortable environment with a lower efficieny.
With regards to the "Equipment", just over seven out of ten of senior staff were satisfied with this aspect while